Friday 7 September 2018
Tuesday 4 September 2018
Save Our Planet
This is on my blog because I don’t want our world and our animals to suffer from things that we have done
My Poem
My Poem
I am a king creeping up on my prey
I wonder who will dare to challenge me
I hear my predator ready to hunt me
I see my whole kingdom
I want more under my control
I am the king of the jungle I am a lion
I pretend to have friends
I feel sad without my family
I touch the dirt with my colossal paws
I worry about my family
I cry tears that trickle down my cheeks
I am a scared little lion
I understand some people don’t like me
I say to myself stay strong
I dream to be with my family
I try to move on
I hope to find my family
I am a lion that’s all alone
By Zach.H
I am a king creeping up on my prey
I wonder who will dare to challenge me
I hear my predator ready to hunt me
I see my whole kingdom
I want more under my control
I am the king of the jungle I am a lion
I pretend to have friends
I feel sad without my family
I touch the dirt with my colossal paws
I worry about my family
I cry tears that trickle down my cheeks
I am a scared little lion
I understand some people don’t like me
I say to myself stay strong
I dream to be with my family
I try to move on
I hope to find my family
I am a lion that’s all alone
By Zach.H
Friday 10 August 2018
The Wild Things
The Wild Things
Not long ago there was a little group of friends. They were exploring an abandoned building that had been shut down since 1845 but what they didn’t know was there was a rumor that the place was haunted by three wild things and if you went in you wouldn’t come out. But that wasn’t the only thing about the building because the security camera hadn’t shut off. So every night in the control room they would be watching waiting to see if anything would show but nothing did until the one night when the friends broke in. ‘‘What’s that’’ asked Sophia? ‘‘What there's nothing here’’ explained lucas. ‘‘THAT THINGS ALIVE’’ !!! screamed Emma ‘‘what do you mean’’ asked liam ‘’I’ll explain while we escape’’ yelled Emma. Only one kid got out of the building that night but the wild things won’t rest until they take down every one of their victims so sweet dreams Sophia
By Zach
Not long ago there was a little group of friends. They were exploring an abandoned building that had been shut down since 1845 but what they didn’t know was there was a rumor that the place was haunted by three wild things and if you went in you wouldn’t come out. But that wasn’t the only thing about the building because the security camera hadn’t shut off. So every night in the control room they would be watching waiting to see if anything would show but nothing did until the one night when the friends broke in. ‘‘What’s that’’ asked Sophia? ‘‘What there's nothing here’’ explained lucas. ‘‘THAT THINGS ALIVE’’ !!! screamed Emma ‘‘what do you mean’’ asked liam ‘’I’ll explain while we escape’’ yelled Emma. Only one kid got out of the building that night but the wild things won’t rest until they take down every one of their victims so sweet dreams Sophia
By Zach
Friday 22 June 2018
The Murder Mysterei
The Murder Mysterie
‘‘Have you ever felt so smart in your life Jack?’’ asked Mitchell. ‘‘It all adds up now. The murderer used the the old bridge to get down to the jetty where the boat was and rowed along the river to get to the house. Then when he got to the house he murdered the owner and used his dog to find clues for where the key was hidden. Now we just need to find out if he found the key or not’’
‘‘and if he didn’t then we still have a chance to go to the house and find out what it unlocks and what the letter under it says,’’ added Jack.
‘‘Now we just need to find clues of how he got down to the bridge and if the boat is still there’’ suggested Jack. ‘‘Let’s go and just hope we don’t run into a trap’’.
‘‘When we get there do you think it will be safe to cross or not’’ ? Jack asked .
‘‘I guess we’re about to find out. The two walked slowly across the old creaking bridge. SNAP the ropes holding the bridge up had broken. Jack and Mitchell went plummeting down in to the river below. SPLASH The two boys had hit the water and sank under. Luckily they were able to struggle up to the surface and swim to a little sandbank, The boys lay there on the sand breathing rapidly.
‘‘I knew that bridge wasn’t safe Mitchell,’’ panted Jack.
‘‘Sorry Jack I should of listened,’’ Mitchell replied feeling sorry.
‘‘Well it wasn’t a complete failure,’’ whispered Jack well pointing at a little wooden boat next to them that was hidden in a bush. The two sighed with relief.
‘‘So we’re not stuck down here forever?’’ Mitchell asked feeling good.
‘‘Well we better get going,’’ Jack explained trying to get up.
‘‘This may sound silly Jack but can we stay here a bit longer I really need to catch my breath I’m exhausted,’’ Mitchell tiredly asked like he had been holding his breath for a whole month.
‘‘Ok but not too long we’ve got a mystery to solve a big mystery. After half an hour the two set off again on their major mystery but there worries weren’t over they were just beginning.....
By Zach.H & edited by Giorgio.B
Level 3/4
This is avery well developed mystery fantasy. Great attention to detail nand you are developing effective use of speech marks. I enjoyed wondering what was going to happen next.
Next steps - Careful attention to punctuation
‘‘Have you ever felt so smart in your life Jack?’’ asked Mitchell. ‘‘It all adds up now. The murderer used the the old bridge to get down to the jetty where the boat was and rowed along the river to get to the house. Then when he got to the house he murdered the owner and used his dog to find clues for where the key was hidden. Now we just need to find out if he found the key or not’’
‘‘and if he didn’t then we still have a chance to go to the house and find out what it unlocks and what the letter under it says,’’ added Jack.
‘‘Now we just need to find clues of how he got down to the bridge and if the boat is still there’’ suggested Jack. ‘‘Let’s go and just hope we don’t run into a trap’’.
‘‘When we get there do you think it will be safe to cross or not’’ ? Jack asked .
‘‘I guess we’re about to find out. The two walked slowly across the old creaking bridge. SNAP the ropes holding the bridge up had broken. Jack and Mitchell went plummeting down in to the river below. SPLASH The two boys had hit the water and sank under. Luckily they were able to struggle up to the surface and swim to a little sandbank, The boys lay there on the sand breathing rapidly.
‘‘I knew that bridge wasn’t safe Mitchell,’’ panted Jack.
‘‘Sorry Jack I should of listened,’’ Mitchell replied feeling sorry.
‘‘Well it wasn’t a complete failure,’’ whispered Jack well pointing at a little wooden boat next to them that was hidden in a bush. The two sighed with relief.
‘‘So we’re not stuck down here forever?’’ Mitchell asked feeling good.
‘‘Well we better get going,’’ Jack explained trying to get up.
‘‘This may sound silly Jack but can we stay here a bit longer I really need to catch my breath I’m exhausted,’’ Mitchell tiredly asked like he had been holding his breath for a whole month.
‘‘Ok but not too long we’ve got a mystery to solve a big mystery. After half an hour the two set off again on their major mystery but there worries weren’t over they were just beginning.....
By Zach.H & edited by Giorgio.B
Level 3/4
This is avery well developed mystery fantasy. Great attention to detail nand you are developing effective use of speech marks. I enjoyed wondering what was going to happen next.
Next steps - Careful attention to punctuation
Wednesday 23 May 2018
All About Me
Hi my name is Zach I go to Waitohu School in Otaki New Zealand. I am a year 5 in room three with some awesome friends. My favorite sports are soccer, cricket and golf and my favorite food is watermelon
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